Tuesday, November 27, 2007

with eyes closed

I feel you

sink your teeth into my
soul-

you've made a meal of me.


Written for Read Write Poem

12 comments:

S. Thomas Summers said...

since you use little punctuation, i would eliminate it all together. erotic, sexy. well spun.

Anna said...

Ouch. I really feel this one.

Anonymous said...

This is a real zinger, Sara. At first I read it as:

"sink your teeth into my
shoulder"

so it made the last 2 lines that much more surprising. Powerful and explicit.

janetleigh

Rose Dewy Knickers said...

Sara, this is very sensual and charged with emotion.

Rose

xo

crimsonflaw said...

sara this is a chilling set of lines with an ominous velocity...

beautiful but different from the treasures found on your site..

Brian said...

the last line really does it for me on this one. i agree with crimson flaw, a little different...

Mariacristina said...

I like the melding of body and spirit here.

aka Danny Wise said...

I like the 'inner person' thing - it gives a whole new meaning to soul food!

Jo Janoski said...

Oddly romantic...no, make that deliciously romantic!

S. Thomas Summers said...

let's see some new stuff on this shore. hope you're well.

Ario said...

Yummie :)

Very tangible this one. It twists and it turns. I like it a lot.

UL said...

Ah, what a meal...! I love the thought process. Thank you.

UL