Thursday, November 15, 2007

Inside Out

She spends her time in fallout shelters in her mind, can't run far enough.

Putting pen to page -this life- making beauty out of nothing at all.

These poems are an attempt at writing American Sentences for a prompt at

14 comments:

Jo said...

Sara, these are both great.

Anna said...

Sarah, this one is really well done. Very beautiful and communicates the concept of creation from nothing to something, and the first line is just too true.

PS I have been traveling and got backlogged on my online communications over the last few days. I'll catch up.

crimsonflaw said...

I love the first line. The second one is true, with its lurch long bridge of hyphens but the state of the poem...is in the first line for me.

Christine said...

I like the fallout shelters in her mind.

Thought in sharp focus.

Linda said...

Waht a beautiful way of talking about poetry!

Rethabile said...

Beauts. I really enjoy the wallop these things pack. And I doubt that without it they'd be American sentences at all.

aka Danny Wise said...

Hey Writerwoman, I'm starting to see the unseen, it looks like you've got the 'write' idea here!

Jessica said...

I love the first one. Great image!

kimberley said...

good work - I especially like the "fallout shelters in her mind" - I think I have some of those. :)

gautami tripathy said...

You did well with both!

S. Thomas Summers said...

interesting prompt. i need to check it out.

UL said...

"Putting pen to page -this life- making beauty out of nothing at all.", I loved this one, Sara. You wrote down the thoughts in my heart.

Crafty Green Poet said...

the second one had me noddig - 'so true, so true'. The first is just stunning

Anonymous said...

I thought I left a comment here, Sara, about the first one being so vivid an image, and made me shudder..brrr

And the second one is just so true! And you do it superbly..:)


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