Monday, November 12, 2007

A hand reaching through the fire-
take me in
and shield my soul.

The world around us is dying,
but with
you here


I would never
know.




*written for the prompt Friendship at Writer's Island

21 comments:

Marie said...

Really like the first verse.

writerwoman said...

Thanks, Marie!

Mary Timme said...

Oh, Nice. That is catching, quick and to the point. Just what I need. Good, and I liked it a lot!

Just Jen said...

the world is dying, with you here, i don't notice.
Very powerful.

Mary Timme said...

Oh!!!! Oh!!!

jadey said...

This is a very sweet poem in regards to friendship.

tumblewords said...

Glorious words and thought! Love it!

Ario said...

Love the way soul and know kind of rhyme here.

This is one of those poems I enjoy reading again and again.

keith hillman said...

Aaaah! Really sweet.

lissa said...

Very sweet and thought provoking.

...deb said...

The title is evocative and changes the poem for me. I had missed it at first; it reshapes the meaning.

UL said...

I love your words. Such a beautiful take on friendship, thank you. I noticed the part 3 of your story earlier today, I missed it last time on 3WW, heading there to read :) Thank you.

Madeleine said...

I like that. It says a lot in very few words.
Mad Kane

gautami tripathy said...

Very beautiful...

crimsonflaw said...

the last line is beautiful, a poem wiht your typically profound sorrow gathered in a simple sad twist...beautiful my friend

S. Thomas Summers said...

I'd be wary of using "soul" in a poem. It's one of those words that has been used again, again, again...just a thought.

Hope you're well.

S. Thomas Summers

Brian said...

i like the use of image and then message...it sets the tone for the contrast. not sure you need the italics.. well maybe not both of them.

janetleigh said...

I just love these lines:

"the world is dying,
with you here,
I don't notice."

Some people are just like that..a safe refuge from the evils of the world. I like this one, Sara. A lot.

Jo said...

Lovely this.

Sarayu said...

ohhh wow... brilliant emotion in just few words... loved it Sara...

manystories said...

Gave me an instantaneous smile. I know the feeling. Very simple, to the point, easy to grasp.