what can I do now?
you’re gone
you are gone
from my side
the seat besides me stays empty
the bed grows cold
frozen
untouched
and nothing else
I do
will ever be enough
to fill this space
it’d be so much easier if I could just not think
not think
but I do,
I do
and this is all my fault
you’re gone,
gone
By Sara
written October 8th,2006.
8 comments:
I understand the feeling of anguish and hurt you speak of in your poem - a desolate soul with no place to belong save the void. Sad but powerfully written, Sara.
This feeling is very real to me. Is one of the worst. Very strong poem.
hello love,
i'd start from stanza 3.
S. Thomas Summers
Just something I thought of. You play a little with fonts in your poems. How about enlargening some fonts more than others to suggest different feelings or attenuations?
Otherwise a very spare poem to suggest the emptiness after someone close has left.
Full of feelings, hurt and broken ones. I hope you're not actually there, Sarah.
Dear Sara,
As always your sorrow flows into the greater abstract....whole and intact , with grace and inviolable.
shakir
Thank you, Shakir. Your words touch my heart.
This poem brings me back to some lonely break ups. A hard moment.
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