Wednesday, May 07, 2008

Here I stand
my hands empty

Here I stand
bereft of dreams

Here I stand
where you left me

Here I stand
breaking softly


This poem was written in response to a prompt at Poets Who Blog Interactive. This first line comes from the Leonard Cohen song I'm Your Man.

15 comments:

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

Yowch. That's really... barren.

STP said...

Very much like the previous piece. These poems are so painfully naked.

S. Thomas Summers said...

drop the cap. enjoyed how terse you are able to be. thanks!!!

Kilroy_60 said...

Powerful.

I stopped by to give you a big THUMBS UP on StumbleUpon.

Cheers!

Kunjubi said...

Appeasing!...appealing!...True craftmanship!.. Gloomy.. You are talented..Keep it up..Love you for such a poem...cheers... kunjubi

Ario said...

Succinct and heart-rending. Another poem that packs such an emotional punch, Sara. Loved it.

Suzan Abrams said...

Your poems are always beautiful my dear Sarah. Always so.:-)

Sorry I haven't been around but I hope to remedy that from now. I have appreciated you coming by, old friend. Big hug.

Scot said...

"breaking softly"

unique and makes it

janetleigh said...

Concise and exacting, this bare-boned, painful declaration is as tight as a one-act play, Sara. It cuts, like an arrow through the heart. That first line repeated throughout is powerful and shows your skill in setting the tone, Sara. Kudos..:)

Deborah Vatcher said...

so full of despair. the last line really clinched it for me, made me think of a wave breaking on shore then washing out to sea.

Jade said...

i adore the simplicity of this
poem, of this person's plea.

Suzan Abrams said...

Just stopping by to ask how you are, Sara. Hope you're well.

mariacristina said...

you have the gift of song writing in you. Many of your poems read in a lovely, hypnotic way.

utopianfragments said...

i like that one very much. strong and yet fregile. short and whole

poetrydances said...

This is an amazingly powerful write for such a short poem. Leaves the reader so close to you with the last line.

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