Here I stand
my hands empty
Here I stand
bereft of dreams
Here I stand
where you left me
Here I stand
breaking softly
This poem was written in response to a prompt at Poets Who Blog Interactive. This first line comes from the Leonard Cohen song I'm Your Man.
15 comments:
Yowch. That's really... barren.
Very much like the previous piece. These poems are so painfully naked.
drop the cap. enjoyed how terse you are able to be. thanks!!!
Powerful.
I stopped by to give you a big THUMBS UP on StumbleUpon.
Cheers!
Appeasing!...appealing!...True craftmanship!.. Gloomy.. You are talented..Keep it up..Love you for such a poem...cheers... kunjubi
Succinct and heart-rending. Another poem that packs such an emotional punch, Sara. Loved it.
Your poems are always beautiful my dear Sarah. Always so.:-)
Sorry I haven't been around but I hope to remedy that from now. I have appreciated you coming by, old friend. Big hug.
"breaking softly"
unique and makes it
Concise and exacting, this bare-boned, painful declaration is as tight as a one-act play, Sara. It cuts, like an arrow through the heart. That first line repeated throughout is powerful and shows your skill in setting the tone, Sara. Kudos..:)
so full of despair. the last line really clinched it for me, made me think of a wave breaking on shore then washing out to sea.
i adore the simplicity of this
poem, of this person's plea.
Just stopping by to ask how you are, Sara. Hope you're well.
you have the gift of song writing in you. Many of your poems read in a lovely, hypnotic way.
i like that one very much. strong and yet fregile. short and whole
This is an amazingly powerful write for such a short poem. Leaves the reader so close to you with the last line.
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