Bathe me in
my own expulsions,
my own contortions.
Words extorted.
I'll pay the price,
pay the tithe
for
stealing double portions of
this life.
Sympathize, won’t you?
This is all I know,
all I know,
all I know how to do.
Lay me in the words I’ve spewed.
Drown me in
a poem or two.
And I shall die like I have lived
gladly sinking in the words
I give
to you.
Drown me in a poem or two or two or two....
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Work process for this:
The title is a take off on Murder Your Darlings, a phrase that is known to fiction writers.
This line
Stealing double portions of this life.
is a nod to a quote I read about all fiction writers getting to live twice, once in their actions and once in their stories.
The poem is inspired by another poem of mine called Drowning in a word
http://shewritespoetry.blogspot.com/2006/10/slightly-edited-drowning-in-word.html
Thanks for reading.
nice poems on your blog. i have learnt the pleasures of writing and blogging a little late in life you are welcome to share the joy if you so choose, my URL are
http://www.kavitanjali.com/newpoets/mukul.htm
http://mukulsworld.wordpress.com
http://www.blogger.com/profile/00373780330992106695
I like the way this sounds when read--like the word choice.
A very intelligent poem, I like it for the sheer intellectual backbone to it. The tone also intrigues and I can't decide whether the concluding lines are playful or rather sinister.
I very much enjoyed it.
what a way to go!!!!!!
very nice!!
this was nice Sarah,really nice...hey there's a gift awaiting you at my space, hope you will like it, i havent been able to come by lately, but wanted to let you know that you are in my thoughts.
Exquisitely honed, Sara, especially this stanza..
"I'll pay the price,
pay the tithe
for
stealing double portions of
this life."
..for its use of alliteration and subtle rhymes, viz price/life. Your poems always show a depth of knowledge about life's intricacies and our struggle to understand them. Superb work, truly..:)
It's a very interesting poem you wrote. The style is subtle and still full of meaning.
I love the sensuality too!
Kudoz!
I like these lines:
Drown me in
a poem or two.
I'm sorry my commenting has been sporadic. Working on handling some life situations ...
...drown me in a poem or two
or two -- love the poem.
Absolutely love this, the words,structure and rhythm all contribute to making this amazing poem!!!
not bad,, nut very depressing...
I love the flow of this piece. It has an rapidity that attracts attention
I really like this, Sara.
Hi Sara,
It's been a long long time hasn't it.
Mostly, it's my fault. I had been so long away from the blogging world and then too, blogging only sporadically.
I hope all your novel-writing is going on in a super fashion.
And I so love this poem.
It reminds me distinctly of an Alfred Hitchcock thriller. Well-crafted. :-)
Big hug, my old friend.
"Sympathize, won’t you?
This is all I know,
all I know,
all I know how to do."
The above is my favorite part. To me the repetition might even imply a sort of nervous unravelling.
And those poor darlings, strewn about the landscape. But with poetry, it is ALL darlings, isn't it? In various states of repair.
Anyway, the title, regardless of source, is arresting.
xo
Blossom
I like how the poem progresses from "bathe" in the first line to "drown" in the last. Also thought that "stealing double portions of this life" was a powerful metaphor. Enjoyed this dark and thoughtful piece.
love your unique style ww, your
poems are like have words brushed
across the psyche, i get the
feel, that i know well, of words,
poems as the ultimate lover.
Love this piece Sara. It is such a celebration of writing, and what it is to write. Has a nice sensual edge to it, in that it suggests the visceral nature of words... very cool! ;)
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