words dripping off my tongue
swirling round this
house
breaking glass is the sound
of truth pouring
down
down
down
beat the past
bury me
with the horror you can't believe
this was supposed to be a secret
this was supposed to be a secret
this was supposed to be a secret
"Don’t you know how to keep a secret?"
* this was written for Writer's Island. The prompt was controversial.
10 comments:
Deeply disturbing. Gave me a chill.
I like the tile of your blog, beach loving woman that I am and of course, the DREAMS.
Reminds me of a bad dream I had once, I repeated the scream
That's the end of the story
that's the end of the story
that's the end of the story
I want to wake up!
Nice write!
'Can you keep a secret?' - famous last words. Got me thinking this one.
This made me cry.
A heartbreaker. The deep ache of
secret exposed. The repetiton adds
to the beating of a
frightened heart.
Sara,
Very good choice of words. The repetition did give me an unsettling feeling when I was finished reading.
the repetition of the lines is effective just like Robert Frost's stopping by woods on a snowy evening. :)
Damned nice, Sara...it's wonderful to see new words, no matter the Muse. Peace be upon you.
This is also fantastic - so emotionally tight. You always use repetition to such great effect (and affect)
Oh, I like this. I idea of truth breaking though a secret...nice imagery.
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