Tuesday, October 21, 2008

words dripping off my tongue
swirling round this
house

breaking glass is the sound
of truth pouring
down

down
down

beat the past
bury me

with the horror you can't believe

this was supposed to be a secret
this was supposed to be a secret
this was supposed to be a secret


"Don’t you know how to keep a secret?"


* this was written for Writer's Island. The prompt was controversial.

10 comments:

Annie said...

Deeply disturbing. Gave me a chill.

I like the tile of your blog, beach loving woman that I am and of course, the DREAMS.

SweetTalkingGuy said...

Reminds me of a bad dream I had once, I repeated the scream

That's the end of the story
that's the end of the story
that's the end of the story

I want to wake up!

Nice write!

Stan Ski said...

'Can you keep a secret?' - famous last words. Got me thinking this one.

emmy said...

This made me cry.

Cynthia said...

A heartbreaker. The deep ache of
secret exposed. The repetiton adds
to the beating of a
frightened heart.

Clockworkchris said...

Sara,
Very good choice of words. The repetition did give me an unsettling feeling when I was finished reading.

Damsel said...

the repetition of the lines is effective just like Robert Frost's stopping by woods on a snowy evening. :)

The Mad Celt said...

Damned nice, Sara...it's wonderful to see new words, no matter the Muse. Peace be upon you.

Brian said...

This is also fantastic - so emotionally tight. You always use repetition to such great effect (and affect)

Kaosar said...

Oh, I like this. I idea of truth breaking though a secret...nice imagery.