Sarah, this one is really well done. Very beautiful and communicates the concept of creation from nothing to something, and the first line is just too true.
PS I have been traveling and got backlogged on my online communications over the last few days. I'll catch up.
Sara, these are both great.
ReplyDeleteSarah, this one is really well done. Very beautiful and communicates the concept of creation from nothing to something, and the first line is just too true.
ReplyDeletePS I have been traveling and got backlogged on my online communications over the last few days. I'll catch up.
I love the first line. The second one is true, with its lurch long bridge of hyphens but the state of the poem...is in the first line for me.
ReplyDeleteI like the fallout shelters in her mind.
ReplyDeleteThought in sharp focus.
Waht a beautiful way of talking about poetry!
ReplyDeleteBeauts. I really enjoy the wallop these things pack. And I doubt that without it they'd be American sentences at all.
ReplyDeleteHey Writerwoman, I'm starting to see the unseen, it looks like you've got the 'write' idea here!
ReplyDeleteI love the first one. Great image!
ReplyDeletegood work - I especially like the "fallout shelters in her mind" - I think I have some of those. :)
ReplyDeleteYou did well with both!
ReplyDeleteinteresting prompt. i need to check it out.
ReplyDelete"Putting pen to page -this life- making beauty out of nothing at all.", I loved this one, Sara. You wrote down the thoughts in my heart.
ReplyDeletethe second one had me noddig - 'so true, so true'. The first is just stunning
ReplyDeleteI thought I left a comment here, Sara, about the first one being so vivid an image, and made me shudder..brrr
ReplyDeleteAnd the second one is just so true! And you do it superbly..:)
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