Monday, November 12, 2007

A hand reaching through the fire-
take me in
and shield my soul.

The world around us is dying,
but with
you here


I would never
know.




*written for the prompt Friendship at Writer's Island

19 comments:

  1. Really like the first verse.

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  2. Oh, Nice. That is catching, quick and to the point. Just what I need. Good, and I liked it a lot!

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  3. This is a very sweet poem in regards to friendship.

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  4. Glorious words and thought! Love it!

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  5. Love the way soul and know kind of rhyme here.

    This is one of those poems I enjoy reading again and again.

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  6. Very sweet and thought provoking.

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  7. The title is evocative and changes the poem for me. I had missed it at first; it reshapes the meaning.

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  8. I love your words. Such a beautiful take on friendship, thank you. I noticed the part 3 of your story earlier today, I missed it last time on 3WW, heading there to read :) Thank you.

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  9. I like that. It says a lot in very few words.
    Mad Kane

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  10. Very beautiful...

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  11. the last line is beautiful, a poem wiht your typically profound sorrow gathered in a simple sad twist...beautiful my friend

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  12. I'd be wary of using "soul" in a poem. It's one of those words that has been used again, again, again...just a thought.

    Hope you're well.

    S. Thomas Summers

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  13. i like the use of image and then message...it sets the tone for the contrast. not sure you need the italics.. well maybe not both of them.

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  14. I just love these lines:

    "the world is dying,
    with you here,
    I don't notice."

    Some people are just like that..a safe refuge from the evils of the world. I like this one, Sara. A lot.

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  15. ohhh wow... brilliant emotion in just few words... loved it Sara...

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  16. Gave me an instantaneous smile. I know the feeling. Very simple, to the point, easy to grasp.

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