tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post7375048710356537951..comments2023-10-26T06:37:21.560-05:00Comments on The Shores of My Dreams: writerwomanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07645753712657412094noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-900759315830681342008-10-25T11:38:00.000-05:002008-10-25T11:38:00.000-05:00Amazing what you have done withthese lines.Amazing what you have done with<BR/>these lines.Cynthiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10598169309616545734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-91620391363900734852008-06-17T17:33:00.000-05:002008-06-17T17:33:00.000-05:00i like how you found a way to unify the lines arou...i like how you found a way to unify the lines around a theme of the narrator's identity. it's great to make new things out of existing lines. like collage!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-53070601939456287512008-06-15T11:55:00.000-05:002008-06-15T11:55:00.000-05:00So sad this, curated extremelywell. The refrain, t...So sad this, curated extremely<BR/>well. The refrain, tugs at my<BR/>heart and the other lines complete<BR/>making the tears fall.Cynthiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10598169309616545734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-30860892353939126192008-06-14T19:57:00.000-05:002008-06-14T19:57:00.000-05:00I like your usage of other poet's words, it fits s...I like your usage of other poet's words, it fits so well and the repetition of "I am lonely, lonely" feels child-like but somehow I think it's from an adult's viewpoint insteadAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com