tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post7005053283305594822..comments2023-10-26T06:37:21.560-05:00Comments on The Shores of My Dreams: writerwomanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07645753712657412094noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-92139181163350268732008-02-24T20:43:00.000-06:002008-02-24T20:43:00.000-06:00Too long since I've visited, Sarah. Work such as t...Too long since I've visited, Sarah. Work such as this, exponentially compounds my regret.Danhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13986014894382899336noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-74199675106603633862008-02-08T00:42:00.000-06:002008-02-08T00:42:00.000-06:00Excellent, Sara! You put me through the paces, th...Excellent, Sara! You put me through the paces, the way I was made to feel uncomfortable reading the first few lines, driving home a truism I like to avoid thinking about..:) Thanks for an excellent read!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-70674399377770734922008-02-07T14:38:00.000-06:002008-02-07T14:38:00.000-06:00I absolutely adore your first line. "There is this...I absolutely adore your first line. "There is this second that you own." That is one of those lines that I wish I had written first! :o)ourladybethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08003089621986303208noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-19927465493274948732008-02-07T14:15:00.000-06:002008-02-07T14:15:00.000-06:00Very good for a first villanelle. It also has a ve...Very good for a first villanelle. It also has a very bluesy beat to it. I also got drawn to the consistent imagery and word field. This is all in all a very solid poem. Sad though. All that memento mori stuff...I can sense my next midlife crisis approaching...<BR/><BR/>ArioAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-90991158136974761842008-02-07T12:02:00.000-06:002008-02-07T12:02:00.000-06:00a message to take to heart...the rhythm of the vil...a message to take to heart...the rhythm of the villanella speaks to your words...i can hardly believe this is your first! thanks for highlighting this form. i hope to try it when the spirit moves.qualcosa di bellohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15107076097533430296noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-23946902193191231542008-02-06T14:37:00.000-06:002008-02-06T14:37:00.000-06:00I'm really impressed with this. I can't believe it...I'm really impressed with this. I can't believe its your first villanelle! I liked the idea of treasuring each moment, breathing deeply, because we never know when it will be our last...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-80239879158191975992008-02-05T15:13:00.000-06:002008-02-05T15:13:00.000-06:00Hi Sara, nice flow and sentiment. For this form I ...Hi Sara, nice flow and sentiment. For this form I agree with gautami, the stronger the refrain the better.rchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10390033530066470195noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-81451611409215656312008-02-05T13:48:00.000-06:002008-02-05T13:48:00.000-06:00This is really good Sara - I've never attempted a ...This is really good Sara - I've never attempted a villanelle myself. Nice work.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-70020310301028129212008-02-05T05:13:00.000-06:002008-02-05T05:13:00.000-06:00The second refrain is very strong. Stronger the re...The second refrain is very strong. Stronger the refrains better is the Villanelle.<BR/><BR/>I do like yours.<BR/><BR/>One thing, I have found out that villanelle works well for melancholic sad thoughts. I have not written any like that. Howeber, I have read a few like that.<BR/><BR/>Do you know, I have written a <A HREF="http://firmlyrooted.blogspot.com/2007/12/scientifically-insane-paradelle.html" REL="nofollow">paradelle</A> too which is a parody of villanelle?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-52128743626955983072008-02-04T22:01:00.000-06:002008-02-04T22:01:00.000-06:00the form holds me hostage in a away,, yet i feel y...the form holds me hostage in a away,, yet i feel your struggle to break free in the third and forth stanzas,, not only from the form,, but the monotony of life... very nicely done....paisleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08231453820728399262noreply@blogger.com