tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post6450758227435159065..comments2023-10-26T06:37:21.560-05:00Comments on The Shores of My Dreams: writerwomanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07645753712657412094noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-53454616953588187212008-04-22T13:34:00.000-05:002008-04-22T13:34:00.000-05:00Very poignant Sara... right on point to the topic!...Very poignant Sara... right on point to the topic! Unfortunately, I know sly despair all too well, and his comely sister -- depression.<BR/><BR/>If this was autobiographical, I wish you far away from despair. ;)Rob Kistnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11365982588165098990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-24802440043260316742008-03-17T10:08:00.000-05:002008-03-17T10:08:00.000-05:00I am impressed. This is a poem that really hits ho...I am impressed. This is a poem that really hits home with me. Been there, done that, too many times really. <BR/><BR/>Very well written too.<BR/><BR/>Like the subtitle of your blog, so true.<BR/><BR/>Glad I stopped by, got here via Average Poet.<BR/><BR/>Geraldine<BR/><BR/>www.mypoeticpath.wordpress.comGeraldine https://www.blogger.com/profile/07410019941984295767noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-43741829601243940662008-03-06T02:06:00.000-06:002008-03-06T02:06:00.000-06:00lovely words...you have crafted it beautifully!lovely words...you have crafted it beautifully!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-11960209055601110822008-03-02T05:16:00.000-06:002008-03-02T05:16:00.000-06:00Sara, it's great you can accept suggestions from o...Sara, it's great you can accept suggestions from others and from my point of view, I'd only make such a suggestion because I so admire your enormous talent as a poet and my motive is to see your work always shine!<BR/><BR/>On another note, I've just tagged you for the 6-word memoir meme. Please come by <A HREF="http://janetleigh.wordpress.com/" REL="nofollow">Poetmeister...on the road to Parnassus</A><BR/>for instructions on how to play this meme, okay?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-32117993287698277932008-03-01T23:08:00.000-06:002008-03-01T23:08:00.000-06:00First off,thanks for commenting!At first I thought...First off,thanks for commenting!<BR/><BR/>At first I thought that maybe the reason the poem felt incomplete was my very purposeful choice to end it with...<BR/><BR/>You will see that in some of my poems. I use it to say that the pain goes on.<BR/><BR/>But upon reading I have come up with one more line to add to this poem.<BR/><BR/>So thank you for the advice. This time I think you all were right on track.<BR/><BR/>It is very nice of you to take time out of your life to help me. It means a lot to me. I'm touched that you all care enough to comment.<BR/><BR/>SaraAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-42663265693624482122008-03-01T10:10:00.000-06:002008-03-01T10:10:00.000-06:00i agree. quite an effort. much enjoyed. i might ...i agree. quite an effort. much enjoyed. i might suggest you drop all punctuaution and arrange the poem accordingly. might add to the stark loneliness. well spun and done.<BR/><BR/>hope you're well.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-74377509586727101772008-03-01T06:47:00.000-06:002008-03-01T06:47:00.000-06:00The idea of despair as a hunter/hungry and despair...The idea of despair as a hunter/hungry and despair as lover/home are both really powerful - part of me would like to see these two ideas brought together somehow - which is more true? are they both equally true?<BR/><BR/>A haunting poem as it stands - but <BR/>like janetleigh I wonder if there's a little further that this could go.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-10410120836628055502008-02-29T12:12:00.000-06:002008-02-29T12:12:00.000-06:00interesting... never thought of despair as a hunte...interesting... never thought of despair as a hunter but yes, it truly is..you have spoken so eloquently of a fierce enemy...like a lover...very good...little wing writerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16010376737431344381noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-90164839616817993442008-02-29T05:50:00.000-06:002008-02-29T05:50:00.000-06:00This is such a smart poem!! You have really captu...This is such a smart poem!! You have really captured despair for what it is and how it behaves AND how alluring it can be.STPhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18010661731570038007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-37652158130738796272008-02-29T04:07:00.000-06:002008-02-29T04:07:00.000-06:00Sara, your poem really succeeds in describing the ...Sara, your poem really succeeds in describing the pain and aloneness of despair, and I like how you highlight despair as one-liners. It's more powerful with those lines separated out from the rest. I love the idea of despair hunting one down and overtaking by guile and seduction. And although I really like how your poem stands as is, I wonder if the poem ends as strongly as you intended, Sara. Is there a longer poem here.. maybe..? <BR/><BR/>Maybe I'm way off base?..:)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35391385.post-76877892379578066522008-02-28T19:19:00.000-06:002008-02-28T19:19:00.000-06:00despair can be a warm soft place to hide and allow...despair can be a warm soft place to hide and allow life to pass you by.. sometimes the longer you stay the less you want to leave... very well written....paisleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08231453820728399262noreply@blogger.com