Wednesday, May 07, 2008

Here I stand
my hands empty

Here I stand
bereft of dreams

Here I stand
where you left me

Here I stand
breaking softly


This poem was written in response to a prompt at Poets Who Blog Interactive. This first line comes from the Leonard Cohen song I'm Your Man.
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15 comments:

  1. Susan Helene GottfriedMay 07, 2008

    Yowch. That's really... barren.

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  2. STPMay 07, 2008

    Very much like the previous piece. These poems are so painfully naked.

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  3. AnonymousMay 08, 2008

    drop the cap. enjoyed how terse you are able to be. thanks!!!

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  4. Kilroy_60May 09, 2008

    Powerful.

    I stopped by to give you a big THUMBS UP on StumbleUpon.

    Cheers!

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  5. UnknownMay 09, 2008

    Appeasing!...appealing!...True craftmanship!.. Gloomy.. You are talented..Keep it up..Love you for such a poem...cheers... kunjubi

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  6. AnonymousMay 10, 2008

    Succinct and heart-rending. Another poem that packs such an emotional punch, Sara. Loved it.

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  7. Suzan Abrams, email: suzanabrams@live.co.ukMay 11, 2008

    Your poems are always beautiful my dear Sarah. Always so.:-)

    Sorry I haven't been around but I hope to remedy that from now. I have appreciated you coming by, old friend. Big hug.

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  8. ScotMay 13, 2008

    "breaking softly"

    unique and makes it

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  9. AnonymousMay 15, 2008

    Concise and exacting, this bare-boned, painful declaration is as tight as a one-act play, Sara. It cuts, like an arrow through the heart. That first line repeated throughout is powerful and shows your skill in setting the tone, Sara. Kudos..:)

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  10. Deborah VatcherMay 16, 2008

    so full of despair. the last line really clinched it for me, made me think of a wave breaking on shore then washing out to sea.

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  11. JadeMay 17, 2008

    i adore the simplicity of this
    poem, of this person's plea.

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  12. Suzan Abrams, email: suzanabrams@live.co.ukMay 20, 2008

    Just stopping by to ask how you are, Sara. Hope you're well.

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  13. AnonymousMay 26, 2008

    you have the gift of song writing in you. Many of your poems read in a lovely, hypnotic way.

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  14. AnonymousDecember 29, 2008

    i like that one very much. strong and yet fregile. short and whole

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  15. PolitifollFebruary 06, 2009

    This is an amazingly powerful write for such a short poem. Leaves the reader so close to you with the last line.

    We posted a link to this on poetrydances.com

    here-
    www.poetrydances.com/poetrydancesnovember.htm

    Please visit the site if you want to find out how to be shown as a favorite writer there.

    regards
    Anthony French
    www.Poetrydances.com

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