Tuesday, November 27, 2007

with eyes closed

I feel you

sink your teeth into my
soul-

you've made a meal of me.


Written for Read Write Poem
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12 comments:

  1. AnonymousNovember 28, 2007

    since you use little punctuation, i would eliminate it all together. erotic, sexy. well spun.

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  2. AnnaNovember 28, 2007

    Ouch. I really feel this one.

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  3. AnonymousNovember 30, 2007

    This is a real zinger, Sara. At first I read it as:

    "sink your teeth into my
    shoulder"

    so it made the last 2 lines that much more surprising. Powerful and explicit.

    janetleigh

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  4. AnonymousNovember 30, 2007

    Sara, this is very sensual and charged with emotion.

    Rose

    xo

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  5. crimsonflawDecember 02, 2007

    sara this is a chilling set of lines with an ominous velocity...

    beautiful but different from the treasures found on your site..

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  6. BrianDecember 02, 2007

    the last line really does it for me on this one. i agree with crimson flaw, a little different...

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  7. Christine SwintDecember 02, 2007

    I like the melding of body and spirit here.

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  8. Andy SewinaDecember 03, 2007

    I like the 'inner person' thing - it gives a whole new meaning to soul food!

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  9. Jo JanoskiDecember 03, 2007

    Oddly romantic...no, make that deliciously romantic!

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  10. AnonymousDecember 06, 2007

    let's see some new stuff on this shore. hope you're well.

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  11. nescioDecember 13, 2007

    Yummie :)

    Very tangible this one. It twists and it turns. I like it a lot.

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  12. AnonymousDecember 13, 2007

    Ah, what a meal...! I love the thought process. Thank you.

    UL

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